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Sunrise on a Dead World by TwilightAmbiance Sunrise on a Dead World by TwilightAmbiance
Created with Ultra Fractal 4.

Before I go any further, much credit goes to =monochromatic-stains for the parameters I based this off of. Thanks a lot!

This is only two layers, surprisingly. I love the light I got from it, but I'm left wondering whether I used the negative space well. I think it puts great emphasis on the concept, but there may be too much of it. Also, I'm concerned about how reaction will be to the focal point hitting the right border. Trust me, though, it looks better this way. :lmao:

Comments and critiquing greatly appreciated. :)
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SaTaNiA Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing :jawdrop:

:+fav: :+favlove:
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! :)
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SaTaNiA Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome !
I really enjoy your dev!
Smooth perfect gradient, Really a nice glassy shape !
Everything is perfect on !

Really a great job !
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UchihaItachi121 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2009
No critique needed xD
That looks awesome!
Nice onee bro ;P
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much. :)
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UchihaItachi121 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2009
No worries ;P
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Yonaka-Niji Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Student Writer
Stunning!
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks. :)
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bubblelady Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Student Photographer
very pretty :D
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! :)
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bubblelady Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Photographer
No problemo! ^^ :boogie:
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esintu Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yea, well, what =trystianity said about the technical details :slow:

about the concept, i really like the serenity of the piece, don't really find it disturbing, so the title and the dystopia it implies doesn't really work for me. might be because of the hot colors. if you want to keep the title, I would either reduce the saturation even more or just add some blue and gray tones in there to give it a more "dead" feel. Or maybe just keep the title for another piece and give this one a more pleasant name :D anyway, just a suggestion. I really like the minimalism and the calmness here. makes me want to wake up early to watch the sun rise :)
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, I wanted the dystopia to be more of a background for the fractal. I see the piece itself as comforting rather than disturbing. I just think the title adds a little more of a story to it, that's all. :)

I hope that made sense. :lmao:
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OutsideFate Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Student Digital Artist
"and deep from the void, the hope arrise"
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"...and they ate SNAPED LIMBS in peace."
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OutsideFate Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Lawl
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trystianity Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
I think the thick diagonal lines hitting the hot spot save your composition. They are stronger cues defining the path of the eye. On the other hand, the strength of the diagonals is also making me think the white focal point needs something more - it's not strong enough. I think the lighting is well done but I would also like to see a softer shift between the white and yellow on the gradient. I think it's a bit too abrupt. I think the negative space is fine, but the shape of the boundary between negative and positive could be improved.

I hope it doesn't sound like I'm ripping on it, it's really good to see experimental UF work, and use of lighting is great. :)
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ripping on my work? Hardly. This is exactly what I want when it comes to constructive criticism. :)

The focal point is something I worried about a lot. I wanted it to be strong, but not so strong that it would end up being semi-solid and pasty white. Perhaps with a few more layers, I can improve on it. Also of note is something I didn't put in the artist's comments, which is that the focal point is supposed to be instantaneous; the sunrise does not slowly rise up, but rather shoots forth at lightning speed. This also, in a way, explains why the border between darkness and light is rather harsh. I probably should've tipped the viewer off to this sooner. :hmm:

Thanks a ton for the critique, Trystian. I appreciate it. :)
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NatalieKelsey Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I personally like the way your negative space works (If you can see the whole picture...if you have to scroll, you go...hey....lol!) and I think your title meshes well with the dark-to-light composition. Not a big fan of hot spots or glare or lens flare but here the bright light works with the concept. I love the colors. It doesn't seem like a dead world to me, but more like sunrise on a tech world. ;) Great work!
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TwilightAmbiance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm not a fan of hot spots, either, but if I can make decent use of them, I will! :D

My first thought about naming this piece was "Future Sunrise" because of the technical aspect of the fractal, but I thought a little bit of dystopia suited it better.

Thanks for the critique, Natalie. :)
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